please edit the body of my letter?

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Sylar asked:

Dear sir/ma’am,

I would like to transfer in UP Diliman from UP Baguio with mining engineering as my course. My main reason is because of our financial status. My father sends us money from abroad 20,000 a month. My mother budgets this money for my tuition, my allowance, my bus fare, my boarding house, my brothers tuition, my brothers service fee, their food and other common house bills. There are many times wherein my mother is borrowing money because it is not enough for us. As a son, I don’t want my mother and brother to suffer because they need to give some extra money for me because I don’t have any laptop so I need to go to computer shops to make some of my projects in computer science. I also ride to school whenever I need to ride because of the weather. I pay for the laundry because sometimes I don’t have time to do them myself. I even have allowance even if we don’t have classes. We know that the tuition fee is higher but still we will be able to save money from boarding house to my daily allowance. It will not be a lot, but it is enough for my mother not to borrow money anymore.

Another reason would be my course. When I was in highschool I didn’t really know what I want. In fact I don’t even know any courses then except for engineering, nursing and law. I applied for nursing in Manila in the upcat form because I was thinking then that many are taking it up. I didn’t have any luck and went to my second choice of campus Baguio with computer science as my course. I thought that it has a computer with it so it might be playing online sudoku, typing, Photoshop or something to do with basic computer but it’s not. I really didn’t like it but still continued for the sake of graduating. We went to the museum near the campus and I saw cool rocks with gold and gems which amazed me of their form and color. I thought of the miners that were trapped inside of the mining field and thought of many things like how can they breathe in a much closed space. How is the ventilation being constructed or why isn’t the mine collapsing fast even though the miners are constantly digging there. Many are saying that if I transfer then I would be a miner. Even my parents told me that, but I told them that it is my decision and later supported me. They wanted me to transfer as an accounting student or a civil engineer but I didn’t want those courses either. Later they supported me for what I want.

These are the reasons that I have for transferring in the university and I am hoping for you kind consideration. Thank you.






One Response to 'please edit the body of my letter?'

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